托福独立写作对于句子的要求,是要高于我们在国内英语课堂上所熟悉的英语写作习惯的。写作的提高并非一日之功,复杂句式的使用当然更依赖大量的阅读和联系。下面就一起分析一下2016年10月15日托福写作真题答案及解析资料!

  2016年10月15日托福综合写作真题

Topic 议题:why sea star population declines
  Reading Listening
Thesis 总论点 The reading points out 44three reasons to explain why sea star population declines. Refute the three explanations mentioned  in reading passage.
Sub-point 1
     分论点1
The parasite attachés itself    to sea star, and thus affects star’s health. This parasite only affects star’s reproductive organ and thus only affects star in its reproductive season. But disease appears during the whole season.
Sub-point2 
     分论点2
The bacteria in the shellfish,    which is the food of sea star, cause sea star decline. For most sea stars, they can tolerate    bacteria, so this bacterium is harmless to sea star. Therefore, there must be    another reason to cause sea star decline.
Sub-point 3
     分论点3
Water temperature rising    weakens the sea star’s immune system. Research found the water temperature in area where the disease outbreaks is quite moderate. Besides, the disease    outbreaks in the area where the water wave is much calmer than other areas;    the reason is still in the mysterious.

  2016年10月15日托福综合写作范文:

  Sample answer:

  The reading and listening discuss why sea star population declines. The reading points out three reasons to explain why sea star population declines. Whereas, the professor totally refutes the three points presented in the passage.

  Firstly, the professor rebuts the reading’s first point that the parasite attachés itself to sea star, and thus affects star’s health. He points out that this parasite only affects star’s reproductive organ and thus only affects star in its reproductive season. But disease appears during the whole season.

  According to the reading material, the bacteria in the shellfish, which is the food of sea star, cause sea star decline. The professor mentions that for most sea stars, they can tolerate bacteria, so this bacterium is harmless to sea star. Therefore, there must be another reason to cause sea star decline.

  At last, reading material points out that water temperature rising weakens the sea star’s immune system. However, the professor explains that the water temperature in area where the disease outbreaks is quite moderate. Besides, the disease outbreaks in the area, where the water wave is much calmer than other areas; the reason is still in mystery.

  2016年10月15日托福独立写作真题:

作文题目: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
Young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term.
题型类别: 利弊类
写作思路:   老题,思路上不难。如果同学们选择agree,就应该讲讲尝试不同工作的好处,例如积累经验,结交不同的朋友,开阔眼界,明确自己真正适合的工作。如果同学们选择disagree,就应该讲讲尝试不同的工作会带来什么弊端。例如会让下一份工作的面试官觉得不够坚持等。 
 从限时写作的角度来看,建议大家写agree,如论是想理由还是举例都会比较容易些。 
 接着来说一下例子,针对这个话题的example也不难。大家可以举一个表哥表姐的例子,例子尽量具体化。例如同学们可以写明某一个cousin具体做了什么工作,在这个过程中积累了什么,下次当他遇到真正适合自己的工作时,他前期的什么方面的积累具体给他带来了什么好处。
写作指导:   Major point: agree Reason 1. Forming perspective about career and improving working skills are largely determined by accumulation of work experiences.
 年轻人,尤其是刚开始工作不久的年轻人,相对来说无论是心理上还是工作技能上都不是那么成熟。所以应该趁年轻多尝试下不同的工作,不同的工作可以让他们学习到更多的知识、技能,了解职场,也更加明确自己适合做什么工作。 Reason 2. Our teamwork performance and social circle are close related to different job experiences.
 一个人要在职场上well performed ,除了个人的知识技能储备,明确的职业目标,还需要很好的与团队的其他同事进行合作的能力。如果一个年轻人曾经尝试过不同的工作,那么他一定接触过很多不同类型的人(性格上、工作种类上),他的团队合作能力也将提升,对于之后工作的开展很有好处。 
 同时,在做不同工作的过程中,年轻人可以积累宝贵的人脉,这是成功的极其重要的因素。(此处可举例说明) Reason 3. 让步段 
 过于频繁的换工作可能会有不好的影响。(overly frequent changes of employment may bring about some unfavorable impacts on one’s career.)比如当申请下一份工作时,面试官会关注我们之前的工作经历。但是我们只要足够坦诚,表达自己的不足和初心,说明在之前的工作中学习到的新技能,以及对于当前申请的工作的渴望,不埋怨之前工作的不好时,也能获得面试官的好感。

  2016年10月15日托福独立写作范文:

  The benefits and drawbacks of job hopping have never failed to be the center of debate among employees and employers, and human resource managers of corporations. While some people believe that constant job hopping brings more benefits than pitfalls, others state that the disadvantages of switching between jobs before settling down greatly outweigh the benefits. Personally, I think trying out different positions is beneficial to one’s future career based on the following reasons.

  Admittedly, switching between jobs will make your employers suspicious about your judgment and question your commitment and loyalty to the company, however, the taking different jobs gives a professional countless benefits, like diverse background, broadened social network, better compensation and benefits, etc.

  First off, more job experience provides an individual exposure to different industries and more professional experience, eventually it is conducive for someone to find his or her real expectation and ultimate career goal in the long run. In a small company, employees might have intimate and close friendships with each other, and there is no standard procedure of daily business operation. However, in a colossal corporation, employees have a clear professional boundary and they have to follow strict regulations and procedures when conducting business. Having a chance to work in both small and big companies will help individuals to know which type of company fits them best and they can choose their future career according to their preference. Also, having working experience in different industries and various sized companies makes the employees more flexible and adaptable in distinctive working environments. Future employees will value those who have exposure to a variety of challenges and can bring new ideas and changes to the company.

  Additionally, working in different companies and industries gives an individual more opportunities to explore new social networks and thus enjoy a much more promising career in the near future. An individual can expand his or her social and professional networks after having worked in different places, where one can plant roots and farm relationships and eventually these connections will prove to be very helpful in the near future. This is especially true in today’s overly competitive job market, a dynamic and active professional network will probably help you to land better jobs in the future.

  In conclusion, it is more advisable to take different jobs before settling down permanently since it brings more exposure in different industries, rich professional experience and a more dynamic professional connection.

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