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  In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

  If I have a choice between studying at home using computers and television and studying in a traditional school, I’d choose the traditional setting. Although computers and televisions belong to advanced technology, which are convenient for us, I still don’t think that technology can replace teachers and classrooms.

  After all, technology may fail. Computers often go down and computer programs crash. Televisions break, and the electricity can suddenly go off. In those situations, who's going to teach me? If I'm at school, and the television or the computers stop functioning, there's a teacher to step in and change the lesson plan. Teachers can draw on their teaching experience and be creative. Computers and televisions can't.

  And also I would miss the chance to interact with other students if I weren't going to school. I think learning to play and work with other people is one of the most important lessons we learn in school. It prepares us for life, and for working with other people. Being with other people also helps us discover who we are.

  Another concern I have about studying at home is getting distracted. It's strange, but I think being home alone is more distracting than being at school with a lot of people. At school, we're all focused on the same subjects. At home, it would be so easy to turn off the computer or the television and dosomething else. I might tell myself that it's okay to play a computer game now and make up the study hours later. Chances are, I'd never make up the study time.

  It’s no doubt that I’m in favor of using technology in the classroom. I think computers and television are great ways for students to have access to a lot of information. I just don't think they should be the only tools I have as a student. I also need teachers and other students to help me get a complete education.

  满分要素剖析

  一、语言表达

  1、It's strange, but I think being home alone is more distracting than being at school with a lot of people.这句话比较长,分为两个半句。第一个半句说作者认为在家学习居然比在学校学习更容易分析,这非常奇怪。一个It's strange引领了全局,使得句子结构非常新颖。后面一个but转折,引出了strange的内容。

  2、Computers often go down and computer programs crash.本句话虽然不长,但是crash这个词非常传神,指的是计算机程序的发生错误,这里没有说我们比较常用的一些俗词,而是用了一个crash,非常值得我们学习和借鉴。

  3、If I have a choice between studying at home using computers and television and studying in a traditional school, I’d choose the traditional setting.本句话非常长,同样分为两个小部分,第一个小部分假设了从在家学习和传统学习两个中择一,第二部分写了作者的选择。那么这里的traditional setting指的是在学校学习。Setting指的是一种环境,这样的表达非常地道。

  二、逻辑结构:

  本文属于总分总的结构,也属于正正正的结构,非常经典。三个段落都写了在学校学习的好处。文章使用了非常多的对比手法,写了很多在家学习和在学校学习的利弊,进行了详细的利弊分析。这样的论证手法使得文章充分饱满,论证说理有说服力。这是选择类文章的首选方法。

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