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  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.

  People do behave differently depending on their clothing. The reason is not because they have changed, but because other people treat them differently depending on their choice of clothing.

 

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详细条目

段落

此段结构

本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,。即人们确实会因为穿衣打扮不同而影响人们不同的行为,后面第二句话对主旨进行了简要分析,即人们不是因为人们真的因为穿着不同而改变了行为,是因为他人总是依照别人的穿着而区别对待他人。

此段功能

本段是文章的首段,引出要讨论的问题,帮助明确作者的立场和文章主旨。

  Certain clothes are appropriate for certain situations. For example, a man can wear a suit to work and a woman can wear a skirt and jacket in order to look professional. When everyone dresses the same, there is no problem, as with uniforms. Imagine going to a law office to hire a lawyer. One of the lawyers is wearing a suit; the other is wearing a t-shirt. Which lawyer do you want to hire? Similarly, a mechanic works on cars all day and wears clothes that can get dirty. Wearing more formal attire would be strange and impractical.

 

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段落

此段结构

总分总结构。本段是第一句话引入了对本段的探讨。本段可以分为两个层次。第一层次:举了一个人的例子告诉了我们穿衣服要符合场合,并对这个例子进行了简要发分析。后面又举了几个其他的例子,可以看做第二部分。这两个部分都讲述了衣服对人们behavior的影响。支持了主旨。

此段功能

本段是文章的第二段,也就是正文第一段,写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。

  People treat you differently depending on what you are wearing. It will depend on how well they know you and where you are and what you are wearing. If your clothes are unusual for the situation, they may treat you with suspicion or disdain. I remember once I had an old jacket. I wore it into a fancy restaurant for dinner and my waitress was both confused and somewhat repulsed. I couldn’t understand her reaction since it was still me underneath my coat. I was dressed like a bum and this caused the employees to react negatively to me. Consequently, I was even more polite than usual. This experience shows me that sometimes I do behave differently because of what I’m wearing. By projecting the wrong appearance, I had to overemphasize a quality which I thought was an indisputable and irrevocable part of my personality.

 

内容

详细条目

段落

此段结构

本段是一个总分总的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面对主旨进行了简要分析。然后是补充的作者的例子,生动具体,帮助论证了这个观点。最后一句话收束了全文,重申了论点。

此段功能

本段是文章的第三段,也就是正文第二段,写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。并收束了全文,重申了论点。

  满分要素剖析

  一、语言表达

  1. Imagine going to a law office to hire a lawyer. One of the lawyers is wearing a suit; the other is wearing a t-shirt.这句话描写的非常生动,用了Imagine开头的词引出句子,就像是笔者在跟读者交流,引领读者走向笔者的思维,之后笔者又对之前谈到的进行了细节描写,这里的描写也非常生动,因为用了进行时is wearing,而进行时的作用就是有画面感,更加生活化,能让读者的脑海中有一幅画面形成。

  2. People treat you differently depending on what you are wearing. It will depend on how well they know you and where you are and what you are wearing.这两句话合起来说明了人性的本质,即容易以貌取人,区别对待他人,原因就是这两句提到的what you are wearing,how well they know you and where you are。

  3. If your clothes are unusual for the situation, they may treat you with suspicion or disdain. I remember once I had an old jacket. I wore it into a fancy restaurant for dinner and my waitress was both confused and somewhat repulsed.这句话非常有逻辑,比如第一句提到了suspicion or disdain,意思是收到怀疑和歧视,之后谈到old jacket,这就符合上文所说的People treat you differently depending on what you are wearing.把宏观的论点细节对应,形式非常新颖。之后谈到的fancy restaurant高档的餐厅对应old jacket是个反面对应,说明了作者没有在相应的场合穿着合适的衣服。

  4. Consequently, I was even more polite than usual. This experience shows me that sometimes I do behave differently because of what I’m wearing. Consequently, I was even more polite than usual.这句话是承接上文的过渡句,说明了作者由于受到不平等的待遇确实在行为上变得更加礼貌了。这句话是第三段的点睛之笔,是总结的话,把之前所有的例子都进行了精辟的概括。

  5. By projecting the wrong appearance, I had to overemphasize a quality which I thought was an indisputable and irrevocable part of my personality. 作者只能用其他行为来过分强调自己的品质只是由于the wrong appearance,By projecting the wrong appearance,是方式状语,省略了相同的主语和谓语,这句话后面出现了定语从句which I thought was an indisputable and irrevocable part of my personality.修饰a quality, hich作从句的主语,而I thought 是插入语,之后的indisputable and irrevocable分别是不可辨驳的,不可挽回的意思。

  二、逻辑结构

  本文逻辑架构清晰明了,分为三段来陈述,第一段作者提出逻辑的关键点,即并不是因为人们的穿着打扮导致了人们的行为举止的不同,而真正的原因是他人容易对其的穿着有所评价从而导致人们的行为发生了变化,第一段就如此深刻地剖析了问题的本质,并不是在People do behave differently depending on their clothing. 而是人性的弱点,人都喜欢以貌取人,根据他人的外貌来区别对待,这就导致了被区别对待的人有了不同的behaviors,这样有思想深度的第一段圆满结束。而第二段是给了读者一些日常背景,即不同的服饰是用在不同的场合方面的,以便铺垫下文。全文的重点段落在第三段,作者给出了以第一段为论点的论据,并且是作者自己亲身经历的事例,这样的事例描写起来处处可见生动的细节,及其有说服力。

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