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  AD Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  I think it’s a good idea for schools to require that students to evaluate their teachers. This informs teachers of how students react to teaching methods and to teachers as individuals. Teachers can consider the criticisms and change accordingly. Student support is also valuable. This can create valuable confidence in teachers.

 

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此段结构

本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,即学生应该去评价他们的老师。

此段功能

本段是文章首段,引出要讨论内容,帮助作者陈述观点,摆明立场。

  It’s also helpful for school administrators to hear what students think about school. It keeps administrators informed about what’s happening in the school. It also gives them some idea of which teachers effectively reach the students. However, good administrators know that student evaluations need to be reviewed with a watchful eye for discrimination and immature attitudes. The comments and criticism of education must all be serious and legitimate.

 

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此段结构

本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。文章分两个层次,两个层次是转折关系。第一个层次分析分论点,第二个层次用however进一步转折阐述。

此段功能

本段是文章的第二段,也就是正文第一段,写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。

  Evaluating teachers is also a good exercise for the students. They have to organize their thoughts about what they think of their teachers. They begin to understand what they value in a teacher and what is unhelpful. Evaluating their teachers is also a way for students to think about how they view themselves. Are they working as hard as they should? Is that why their teachers are sometimes sterm or critical? Thinking about these things can help students do better in class. At the very least, they will understand better what is expected of them.

 

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此段结构

本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面对主旨进行了简要分析。

此段功能

本段是文章的第三段,也就是正文第二段,写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。

  Student evaluations of teachers also make students feel as if they have a voice in what happens in their schools. It makes them feel as if they’re part of the system when their opinion is valued by others. Last but not least, it teaches them responsibility.

 

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此段结构

本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面第对主旨进行了简要分析。本段仍然可以分为两个层次,第一个层次指评估老师让学生觉得他们的存在感,第二个层次说学生因此变得更有责任心了,是递进的结构。

此段功能

本段是文章的第四段,也就是正文第三段,写了支持作者立场的第三个分论点。

  满分要素剖析

  一. 语言表达

  1. This informs teachers of how students react to teaching methods and to teachers as individuals. 此句中包含了一个how引导的宾语从句。 第二个teachers和teaching methods 是并列的关系。 这里补充说明一下对于连接代词who, whom, whose, what, which和连接副词when, where, why, how引导的宾语从句来说,这类宾语从句中的主语和谓语的次序一定不能倒装,即必须用陈述语序。此外,它们在句中都充当一定的句子成分,不能省略。

  2. The comments and criticism of education must all be serious and legitimate. 用词简练准确专业。

  3. It keeps administrators informed about what’s happening in the school. 此句中keep somebody informed about what’s happening表示随时让某人知道,了解某事。Keep somebody informed 是个固定短语,相似短语还有 inform sb of / about sth, inform sb that …

  4. Student evaluations of teachers also make students feel as if they have a voice in what happens in their schools. 此句中make sb feel 是固定短语,表示是某人觉得怎么样。 As if 后面的从句用陈述语气而没有用虚拟语气,是因为作者所表达的句子是真实的或机油可能发生或存在的事实。

  5. Last but not least, it teaches them responsibility. 此句中,last but not least 是固定短语,双重否定表示肯定,字面意思为最后,但并不是不重要…, 意为最后,但也很重要的是…

  二. 逻辑结构

  本文使用正正正的大正论述结构,分别从三个角度来论述的,简单易懂,结构清晰。文章每一个段落内都是总分结构,非常中规中矩,而且举了一系列生活学校中的例子,使得论证逻辑严谨,内容丰富。文章三个段落是递进的关系,而且每个段内也有递进关系,这样使得整篇文章逻辑很缜密,显示了作者的别具匠心和深刻的思维。

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