为了提高托福写作水平,让自己的托福写作分数更高,同学们使出了浑身解数,很多同学考虑的是如何应用经典美句,如何使用高级复杂词汇以及所谓高级的句式语法,却时常忽略要先打好基础。智课网小编为考生准备了托福写作185题库独立范文及解析,考生可以通过学习范文来掌握某些表达的正确用词,也能吸取经验,找到托福高分作文的技巧,希望对广大考生有帮助。

  Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: saying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

  Even though I have lived in the same house, in the same neighborhood, in the same city my entire life. I know I would be happy living in a variety of places. Moving would expose me to new people, new weather, and new living styles.

 

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本段是第一句话引出了本文要讨论问题的背景,第二句话提出了作者的论点,即他喜欢住在不同的地方,第三句话进行了简单的原因阐述,引出了下文。

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本段是文章的首段,对文章的讨论话题进行了引入,并点明了作者的主旨。

  Even if I were to move to another part of my city, I would encounter new people. Each neighborhood has a distinct personality. If I moved to that neighborhood, I would meet the shopkeepers and residents that shape that neighborhood’s distinct personality. I may even adopt some of their manners as my own so I could be recognized as part of that community.

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,不同的地方让我们与更多不同的人相遇。本段可以分为两个层次,第一个层次说我们可以认识很多新朋友,第二个部分说我们自己可以学习到更多不同的文化和礼仪,融入一个新的社会。

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本段是文章的第二段,也就是正文第一段,写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。

  If I want to encounter different weather patterns, I would have to move beyond my city. Where I live now, it is the same temperature all year round. I would like to go to a place where there are four seasons so I can experience really cold temperatures as well as the other seasons. I would like to walk in the snow and perhaps go skiing. I could learn winter sports if I lived in the north. Now of course, I live with my parents in their home. It is a one story house built around a courtyard where our family spends a lot of time. If I were to move, I would like to live in an apartment on a very high floor so I could see all the city around me. I could also meet my neighbors in the elevator and we could get together for coffee in my apartment.

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,不同的地方可以让我们感受到不同的天气。后面对全文进行了全文进行了收尾,写了作者现在的情况其实是和家人同住。

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本段是文章的第三段,也就是正文第二段,写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。

  The more I move, the more I would experience change. I would meet new people in every place I lived; I could move to countries with four seasons or even a continent like Antarctica which only has two. Wherever I lived, I would experience living in housing particular to that area. I would then be a citizen of the world, wouldn’t I? Could you call me a foreigner if I called every place my home?

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面对上文进行了概括和总结。然后用反问句升华全文,引发大家思考。

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本段是文章的尾段,承接上文,重述观点,并升华全文主旨。

  满分因素剖析

  一、语言表达

  本文语句通顺,表达流畅,逻辑清晰。作者使用大量从句,尤其是时间状语从句和虚拟语气,使得文章的句子富于变化。在用词方面,作者十分下功夫,使用了很多高级词汇和固定搭配短语,使得文章表达很地道,彰显了作者的语言能力

  1. Moving would expose me to new people, new weather, and new living styles.

  此句中,用到了一个高级词汇expose,动词短语expose sb to sth的意思是“使某人暴露在...中”。在实际应用中,这个短语一般用被动的形式,即sb be exposed to sth,意思是“某人被某种环境包围”,可以用来形容作者周围的社会背景和一些客观现象。例如,Nowadays, we are often exposed to the phenomenon that...

  2. Even if I were to move to another part of my city, I would encounter new people.

  此句中,even if的意思是“即使”,引导让步状语从句,起到让步的作用。Even if引导的从句有一种对未来的假设,因此用到了虚拟虚拟语气。在虚拟语气中,没有系动词was,只能用were。

  3. I may even adopt some of their manners as my own so I could be recognized as part of that community.

  此句中,作者用到了很多英语写作中的固定搭配。动词短语“adopt sth as my own”的意思是“采纳某事作为自己的”,类似的用法还有“take sth as my own”。Be recognized的意思是“被认可,被接纳”。

  4. The more I move, the more I would experience change.

  此句中用到了一个英语作文中常用的结构,the more..., the more,意思是“越来越...”。在托福和GRE考试中,the more..., the more 这个句型暗含一种因果关系,这个结构前面可以跟原因,后面可以跟结果,是通常用法“because”的一种高级替代。

  二、逻辑结构

  文章采用的是正正正的结构,前三个正文段对全文论点进行了分析和支持,使得文章内容丰富,逻辑严谨。文章应用了设问、反问的修辞手法引发大家对问题进行思考,升华了全文。

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