为了提高托福写作水平,让自己的托福写作分数更高,同学们使出了浑身解数,很多同学考虑的是如何应用经典美句,如何使用高级复杂词汇以及所谓高级的句式语法,却时常忽略要先打好基础。智课网小编为考生准备了托福写作185题库独立范文及解析,考生可以通过学习范文来掌握某些表达的正确用词,也能吸取经验,找到托福高分作文的技巧,希望对广大考生有帮助。

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoying doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  I agree that people should sometimes do things that they don't enjoy doing. This is a basic part of being an adult. Plus, some things that aren't "fun" are still good for us in the long run.

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面第二句话对主旨进行了简要分析。第三句话对此进行了补充。

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本段是文章的首段,第一句话即作者的论点,点出了下文主要内容。

  Take personal tasks for example. Who enjoys going to the dentist? Very few people enjoy having their annual check-up with the doctor. Not a lot of people enjoy changing the oil in their car or moving their lawns. These are all things we do because we have to, not because we want to. We realize that taking care of our physical health is the sensible thing to do; we know that if we don't change the oil in our cars, our cars won't run. We understand that grass grows and if we don't mow it, our lawns will look like tropical forests.

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,即本段讨论的是个人任务的问题。后面对主旨进行了简要分析。段中举了一个医生的例子帮助佐证观点。

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本段是文章的第二段,也就是正文第一段,写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。

  Professional jobs are another part of the same equation. No one likes to be stuck with a boring assignment or to be told we have to work with someone no one else gets along with. Sometimes we have to put up with unfair criticism from a supervisor or resentment from those we supervise. If we're in management, we may have had the unpleasant task of having to fire someone. None of these are fun things. Unfortunately, they’re all part of earning a living, something the majority of adults have to do.

 

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本段是文章的第三段,也就是正文第二段,写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。

  On the other hand, sometimes doing something we don't enjoy can lead to enjoyment. Simply by trying it again, we may decide we like doing it. For instance, we may have convinced ourselves we hate to dance. We agree to go to a club only to please someone else. Yet, for some reason, this time we enjoy dancing. We’ve been cheating ourselves out of enjoyment without even knowing it. The same can be said about trying new foods or a new type of museum. Doing what we don't enjoy doesn’t always have to be a bother, does it? It’s just part of life.

 

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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,即本段讨论的是即使不做喜欢的工作也可能带来享受的问题。并用for instance引出了一个跳舞的例子。最后对文章整体做了一个总结,即Doing what we don't enjoy doesn’t always have to be a bother, does it? It’s just part of life.

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本段是文章的第四段,也就是正文第三段,写了支持作者立场的第三个分论点。并重申本文主论点。

  满分因素剖析

  一、语言表达

  文章句子比较短小精悍,没有太难的词汇,简单易懂,错误较少。在句子方面,作者使用了疑问句,反问句,被动语态等结构,句子虽短但变化多端,包含语气态度。在用词方面,作者十分下功夫,使用了很多固定搭配的动词短语,使得表达准确而地道。同时,作者使用了很多高难词汇,让考官眼前一亮。

  美句鉴赏

  1. Professional jobs are another part of the same equation.

  这句话的意思是“职业工作也是如此”。而作者用了一种全新的表达,sth is another part of the same equation,直译就是“...是等式的另一部分,...也满足这个等式”。这种表达方法在从语义上可以吸引读者,让看惯了and,also的读者眼球一亮。

  2. Sometimes we have to put up with unfair criticism from a supervisor or resentment from those we supervise.

  此句中,动词短语“put up with”的意思是“经受,忍受”,后面跟名词或动词的ing形式,同样的表达还有“stand, tolerate”。此句中还用到两个高级词汇“supervise”和“resentment”。Supervise作动词的意思是“监督”,名词supervisor的意思是“监督者”。名词resentment的意思是“怨恨”,同义词是“anger”,可以成为这种土鳖用法的替代。

  3. Yet, for some reason, this time we enjoy dancing. We’ve been cheating ourselves out of enjoyment without even knowing it.

  此句中出现固定搭配cheat sb out of sth,意思是“剥夺某人某物”。同样的用法还有“deprive sb of sth”。在托福考试中,固定搭配的使用会使得文章的语言显得很地道,更容易引起考官的共鸣,为文章添彩。

  二、逻辑结构

  文章采用正正正的大正型支持形式,简单易懂,结构清晰。文章的三个段落是层进式,最后一个段落写的非常有深意。没有继续平淡地分析原因,而是告诉我们即使做不喜欢的事情也可能得到乐趣,进一步增强了本文的说理性。

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