“when people succeed,it is because of hard work.Luck has noting to do with success.”Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above?Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
It is universally acknowledged that hard work is indispensable to success.Scientists toil for years before they make a major discovery.Students study for years before they accepted by a top university.However,less known is the role luck plays in achieving one’s goals.It is often luck that turns years of hard work into success:people discover and invent things with the help of luck,and so do they become famous and find jobs.
首段引出观点，运气促使努力转化为成功，强调luck的作用，在首段中，简单一句给出scientists,students的例子。可以参考的部分有词汇，indispensable，toil;句型有倒装句：less known is... ,强调句：It is often luck that...
People discover and invent things with the help of luck,and so do they become famous and find jobs.
First,luck has help a great number of people invent and discover things,Sir Alexander Fleming experimented with antibacterial substances for nine years before he discovered penicillin.He went through laborious trials and error,but it was on account of luck he looked at the mold on a piece of cheese and got the idea for penicillin there and then.Benjamin Franklin has been trying to prove his idea that lighting and electricity is the same thing,but it was only in flying a kite that he proved that and the concept of a lighting rod happened to strike him.
在托福写作中将论点展开的充分论据是必要的，这一点范文中有体现，利用Sir Alexander Fleming，Benjamin Franklin的例子展开了论点“运气能够帮助人们发明创造”。这些例子都是比较熟悉的，但是学生要反思自己能不能表述出来，尤其是对于人物姓名的拼写也要注意。
Also,luck helps people become famous.Lets consider young authors.Many work hard to learn to white.For example,they take writing classes.Besides,they work at menial jobs so as to survive and gain experience.Then one day a lucky writer may have a piece of writing published and attract public attention.Or the writer meets an editor at the right time and place.Years of continuous writing brings the writer to doors of success,but one lucky chance,like the shot in soccer,eventually helps his or her reap success.
本段短句较多，但结构和意思比较紧凑。可以参考最后一句的写法，其中bring...to doors of success,like the shot in soccer(插入语)，reap success等可以用在相似话题中。
Finally,luck has helped many people secure jobs.One may spend much time writing and sending resumes,reading recruiting ads,going to job interviews.One may pound the pavement for a long time before getting a job.However,it is with luck that a job hunter meets the person who will offer a position to him or her,or learns of a vacancy that is not advertised.Being at the right place at the right time often helps one land a job,and this has to do with luck.
可以参考的有动词词组类似排比的写法：writing and sending resumes,reading recruiting ads,going to job interviews.
One can hardly succeed without hard work,but hard work without luck often leads to nothing.Luck has helped a great number of people find success.In fact,luck goes hand in hand with hard work.