为了能够帮助更多的托福考生进行托福写作高效备考,智课小编特整理了托福独立写作开头段写法举例一文,希望考生们一定要多加练习,想要了解更多托福资讯,就一定要及时关注智课哦!

  首先,回顾一下5分作文的评分标准:

  effectively addresses the writing task

  is well organized and well developed

  use clearly appropriate details to support a thesis

  displays consistent facility in the use of language

  demonstrates syntactic variety and appropriate word choice, thoughit may have occasional errors

  这三大块的要求(organization, development, language use)对于Introduction的意义在于:1)作文必须有一个开头段(这样才完整呀,就像刚认识一个小伙伴,总要问一下“你的名字是?”) 2)好的开头段要做到引出话题和明确表明作者的态度。(也许问“你的名字”并不是一个搭讪的好方式,那怎么办?)

  来个例子吧~ 下文是TPO10的综合写作阅读文章,没错!写作虽然分为两个tasks,但都是英语写作呀~ 笔者一直认为这两篇作文可以一起提高,综合写作就是美国人写的议论分析文章哇~ 接下来,带着大家分析这个开头段,同时解答如下几个问题:

  1) 能不能一开始就写“I agree with the statement.”/“I think ….”?

  2) 题目里的文字我就抄一点点,一丢丢……就一点点,可以吗?

  3) 多少字为宜?

  The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in watersalong the western coast of North America from California to Alaska.(看了第一句,能猜出作者观点吗?当然不能,但是我们可以知道这篇文章一定是关于 seaotter 这个话题的。)When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coaststarted rapidly declining a few years ago, it caused much concern because seaotters play an important ecological role in the coastal ecosystem. Expertsstarted investigating the cause of the decline and quickly realized thatthere were two possible explanations:environmental pollution or attacks by predators.(两个可能的原因,这是可以被质疑被反驳的“观点”哦) Initially, the pollution hypothesis seemed the morelikely of the two.(作者的态度明显就是支持 pollution hypothesis)

  附上sea otter的照片,挺萌的。

  到了答疑时间:

  1)第一句话建议大家先引入话题,不要直接简单粗暴地写“我觉得……”。除非,你打字速度慢到担心后面写不完……(这种情况下,XDF老师们也有专门帮大家提高打英文速度的方法哟)

  2)背景句一般是一个现象,接下来就要针对这个话题提出一个争论点。大多数时候,考生会在此时选择改写题目。问题来了,5分评分标准中的“demonstrates syntactic variety and appropriate word choice”就需要大家做到表达准确,且不能重复。

  3)最后必须给出作者的观点,至于用I think还是In myopinion都不重要,重要的还是这句话整体写的如何。如果有一个短语100%比In my opinion更好,并且100%能拿高分,我想这早就不会是一个秘密了。希望宝宝们注重提高语言能力!而不是机械地背短语。

  4)整篇文章字数要求是300以上,个人建议开头段字数在40-60个。(个别打字狂人且脑洞太大的,你想多写一些我也不拦着。)

  最后,给大家看一个暑假班(25人上机冲刺班+1V1学员)小学霸蔡同学的开头段修改范例。

  范例1:

  Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement: People benefit more from traveling intheir own country than from traveling to foreign countries.

  In recent days, people who travel in othercountries is on the rise, while others, choose to travel to foreigncountriesas a result of thebooming economy.(原文的版本不太和谐,背景句只要提到核心词“旅行/出国旅行”的背景信息即可,尽量不要涉及到人们的观点。加了个原因纯属凑内容啦~)Some people hold the opinion that they can benefit more fromtraveling in native areas, while others prefer to travel to experience adifferent life in other countries.This trend is regarded as a positive one because they are eager to experiencea different life. Some people, however, still consider travelling in one’s owncountry as more favorable.(一些人blabla,然鹅另一些人blabla,这个真的太俗了!并且非常容易重复题目中的说法哦)In my point of view, I would like to travel to foreign countries inan attempt to learn more things.

  范例2:

  Some people argue using a cleaner energy to protect the environment,but some people says the traditional energy sources such as coal and oil isless expensive, what is your suggestion?

  …此处省略若干字…. In my point of view, I totally agree that new energies are a goodreplacement and should be encouragedto use a cleaner energy to protect the environment.

  以上就是智课小编整理的精彩内容托福独立写作开头段写法举例一文,希望可以帮助托福考生,更多精彩内容尽在智课,智课预祝托福考生取得理想成绩!

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