题目是：In some cities, the governments have tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hours. Do you think this development is positive or negative?下面请看雅思写作思路指导及写作批改。
【2】改写题目不准确：这道题采用的是完成时态，即“这件事已经做了，你来评价有效没有”，而不是“有人建议应该做这件事，你来预测下有效没有”。所以恰当的改写是“Therefore，the government has chosen to levy congestion taxation on those who drive during peak time.”
【3】不亮明自己的观点，只改写下题目就不管了：一定要在首段亮明观点，树立好标杆，让考官直截了当get到你的核心看法!就算还没有确定是支持还是否定，最能给考官留下好印象的办法是写“The pros and cons of this policy will be briefly spelled out below”。
佳琪：There is no denying that traffic problem has become a serious issue in China【1】, especially in recent years. During rush hours, traffic jam can be easily found in many roads. So some people suggestedthat【2】 government should impose a congestion tax during rush hours.
佳琪(主1)：With the development of economic, people are increasingly migrating to big cities, the city where people live is getting larger and they may spend more time on commute. So more and more people bought cars to go to work, the continuous increase in the average of the car seems to have become a worldwide problem【4】. In rush hours， imposing a congestion tax can reduce traffic jam, because more people would get up early to take bus and subway. To some extent, this policy can make city moreenvironmentally friendly. Moreover ,with the congestion tax being imposed, drivers will pay more attention to traffic information, they will try their best to prevent traffic jam and drive away from the city’s main roads. When the city traffic jam gets less, workers can spend less time on the road, and can do a lot of useful things in the works on companion with their family【5】.
Teamo(主1): The administration’s imposing a traffic jam tax can bring some benefits to us. For government it can add revenue, than they can use the revenue to build public infrastructure. For citizens, it can make us healthy or safe. By imposing tax ,the use of car will reduce ,then the air pollution would get improved . It will cut down the harmful to our lungs. At the same time, it can slow down the rate of traffic accident【5】.
【6】通篇在支持“政府的确减少交通拥堵”，对Tax能不能减少拥堵视而不见：题目问this development是积极还是消极的，很多宝宝的问题就在于不知道this development到底是哪个development(是事件1“reduce traffic”还是事件2“impose tax”)。那么你反过来想想，减少交通拥堵难道是一件坏事?
Sherry(主1): Too many cars have an adverse impact on the environment. The emission of greenhouse gases have risen temperatures and caused smoggy days .Therefore, it is more easy for people to suffer from air pollution and get diseases .The noise pollution is also a disturbing factor .I think most of us may have experienced that we were awakened by it in the morning.【6】
Teamo(主2): Meanwhile ，I think governments also can take some other measures to reduce car use . Firstly ，they can building up public transports to reduce the use of private cars. Secondly, limiting the license plate number is another way to reduce traffic. Thirdly,the government could raise environmental awareness amongst the general public , appealing citizens to reduce the use of car【7a】.
玥儿(主2)：There are also other ways, which are more beneficial to our environment 【7b】as well as solving the growing traffic. Firstly, traffic law plays an important role to regulate cars. For example, car lottery makes a huge difference on traffic condition, especially in the big cities like Beijing or Shanghai. Only a few lucky people have rights to buy a car and at least one day a week they are not allowed to drive on the street. What’s more, individuals should increase their traffic awareness, instead of shrinking their society responsibilities. People can also turn to some space-saving transportation like bicycles. This can relieve thetraffic congestion【7b】.
【8】过度论述，变成说明文：让步段提出更有效的解决方法后，变身名词解释，用了足足39个词给考官科普潮汐车道(tide line)是什么。对“是什么”的解释虽然不可缺少，但论据的重点还是要去说明“为什么”，即为什么tide line比收税有效，比如“Due to its flexibility to divert traffic,this method has been recognized and applied in many metropolitans.”
芥末柠檬(主2)：However, there are more important things behind imposing tax on people. Governments could make the transportations more reasonable. For instance, the governments could settidal lane ,which means if there is eight lines in a lane. In the morning, when people are going to work, it can use six lines towards to the central business district. And in the evening it turns to two lines. Many metropolitans are taking this method to release their transportation congestion.
Teamo：Not only the state has the responsibility to reduce traffic ,but also our citizens .For more high quality of living , try our best to do something .Make the development of the society more sustainable.