Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination, but others think there are more important factors like money and appearance. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
背景句：People hold different ideas on how to define success. Some believe success originates from hard work and determination, while others think money and appearance are more vital to success.
个人观点： I personally deem both opinions as rational and realistic but hold stronger belief in the first one.
主题句：The first opinion that success comes from hard work and determination wins my full support and trust.
平行列举：People holding such belief are usually pragmatic, independent, down to earth, ambitious and passionate about contributing to society. Despite that hard work on its own does not necessarily reap rewards or fulfill one’s dream, such work ethic and faith in human intelligence have been a constant and fundamental prerequisite for the development of human history and civilization.
主题句： The second opinion that success is mostly made from wealth and beauty gets neither my full support nor denial.
平行列举：It is a plain fact that a financial condition or a better-looking face does provide a person more opportunities and higher possibility to succeed. Besides, even wealth and beauty themselves are socially defined as success already. That’s why the second or further generations of the rich and the powerful would have easier access to money and authority, and why prettier people tend to obtain more attentions, compliments and social connections than those who are less attractive.
In my own perspective, both opinions are based on realistic observations and not easily refutable. The second opinion is a highly personalized definition of success, while the first one represents a pervasive value that applies to all cultures and societies. With dedication and intelligence, interpersonal skill, social connection and a bit of luck are also required to increase the probability of one’s success. Nevertheless, the innate advantages of wealth and beauty can never impair or replace the significance of hard work and determination. Cash will be spent and look withers. But dedication in work and contribution to society remain the most stable, sustainable and effective approaches to success.
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