Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
主体段 1：(赞同/反对女性参军)理由1 + 论证
主体段 2：(赞同/反对女性参军)理由2 + 论证
背景介绍：Whether women should be allowed to serve in the military has triggered spirited debate. Some assert that women should be allowed to defend their country in the same capacity as their male peers.
个人立场：Personally, I agree with their assertion for two reasons.
主题句：History has shown that women are fully capable of performing well in the military.
举例论证：Historically, there were a host of valiant women soldiers whose achievements really put their male counterparts to shame. One need only look at the classic examples of Joan of Arc and Mulan to see how exceptionally women could perform on the battlefield. In my observation, their determination, courage and dignity, to this day, are still being admired by male soldiers and civilians alike throughout the world.
主题句：Moreover, from an enlightened standpoint, female patriots should be granted the right to go to the front line when their motherland is involved in a war.
举例论证：Admittedly, gender inequality was a highly controversial issue in the twentieth century. However, now twelve years into the new millennium, women can learn and teach, work and supervise, vote and voted in most countries just like men. In light of this sweeping progress in gender equality, there is no sense in denying them the right to defend their home country when a war breaks out.
In sum, keeping military services out of bounds of women in the information age is unwarranted. I have been convinced that it is in the best interest of a nation if women are also granted equal rights in this particular arena.
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