Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.Do you agree or disagree?
开头段：个人立场 + 理由陈述
主体段1：(赞同/反对应当每天使用电脑)理由 1 + 论证
主体段2：(赞同/反对应当每天使用电脑)理由 2 + 论证
让步段：不可否认掌握电脑技能的积极影响 + 论证
结尾段：总结理由 + 重申观点
个人立场：I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day.
理由陈述：This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.
主题句：However, the main concern is about the type of computer activities that attract children. These electronic games tend to be very intense and rather violent.
递进解释：The player is usually the ‘hero’ of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centred and insensitive to others.
主题句：Even when children use a computer for other purposes, such as getting information or emailing friends, it is no substitute for human interaction.
递进解释：Spending time with other children and sharing non-virtual experiences is an important part of a child's development that cannot be provided by a computer.
主题句：In spite of this, the obvious benefits of computer skills for young children cannot be denied.
递进解释：Their adult world will be changing constantly in terms of technology and the Internet is the key to all the knowledge and information available in the world today. Therefore it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipment enthusiastically and with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studies and working lives.
总结理由 + 重申观点
I think the main point is to make sure that young children do not overuse computers. Parents must ensure that their children learn to enjoy other kinds of activity and not simply sit at home, learning to live in a virtual world.
tend to agree 比较同意......
be insensitive to 对......麻木不仁
It is no substitute for... 无法代替......
non-virtual experiences 非虚拟的(真实的)体验/经历