今天给大家带来一篇满分雅思考官的雅思写作大作文范文。其实很多同学看满分范文,也不知道究竟逼格高在哪里,甚至语法和用词看上去也并非就超尘脱俗,好在哪里,当然只有老师讲解了,大家才能真正领会得到。接下来请看智课雅思内容:最新雅思高分范文及写作手法详解

  下面为大家具体分析 以上3个元素:

  1.给出清晰观点

  2.解释观点

  3.具体展开论证-注意逻辑!

  People’s opinions differ as to whether or not school children should be given homework. While there are some strong arguments against the setting of homework, I still believe that it is a necessary aspect of education(提出自己的观点).

  There are several reasons why people might argue that homework is an unnecessary burden on children (概括本段大意). Firstly, there is evidence to support the idea that homework does nothing to improve educational outcomes (第1个原因:不会提高成绩). Countries such as Finland, where school children are not given homework, regularly top international educational league tables and outperform nations where setting homework is the norm(举例子论证: improve educational outcomes 和 outperform 对应!我们课程里面重点讲解了举例子的时候, 例子和原因之间核心词的对应!不清楚的同学, 请回到Lesson 4 复习!). Secondly, many parents would agree that the school day is already long enough, and leaves their children too tired to do further study when they return home (第2个原因:太累了-导致回家以后不想学习). Finally, it is recognised that play time is just as beneficial as study time from the perspective of brain development(第3个原因:Play 很重要,对于大脑发展好).

  注意:

  大家看到第2和第3个原因, 没有具体展开, 虽然这个是满分的文章,我个人不建议大家这样写, 最好一个观点写2句话,深入展开, 保持原因1和原因2, 论证字数,详细度的平衡,更容易确保高分, 因为压分很讨厌!

  第2个原因修改:

  Secondly, many parents would agree that the school day is already long enough, and this leaves their children too tired to do further study when they return home. As a result, doing homework may fail to help students review knowledge, or help teachers assess their learning. /

  或者 neither nor will fail to .., nor help ..

  In spite of the above arguments, I support the view that homework has an important role to play in the schooling of children(虽然上面说的很好,还是认为应该留作业-和我们讲解的让步反驳结构很像).The main benefit of homework is that it encourages independent learning and problem solving (原因1: 提高独立思考和问题解决能力), as children are challenged to work through tasks alone and at their own pace(具体原因: 因为学生必须自己完成作业并且完成作业的过程中会觉得自己被挑战)(逻辑链: 独立完成+被挑战-应用课堂里面学习的知识-提高独立学习和思考能力. 用ABC词组的类似逻辑,具体展开论证1个观点). In doing so, students must apply the knowledge that they have learnt in the classroom( 原因2: 承接上面的观点1, 为了做作业, 学生还必须应用课堂里面的知识). For example, by doing mathematics exercises at home, students consolidate their understanding of the concepts taught by their teacher at school (举例子: 数学). In my view, it is important for children to develop an independent study habit because this prepares them to work alone as adults .

  整段结构:

  第1句: 自己的观点

  第2句:原因1 -解释原因1

  第3句:原因2 in doing so 开始 原因2

  第4句:解释原因2

  第5句:重新说自己的观点

  和我们讲解的结构基本一样 。

  我们的写作结构, 没有第5句

  我们的词汇水平,不可能想出来那么多替换词,

  想错了,就会完蛋..所以,我们才会省略哈

  In conclusion, homework certainly has its drawbacks, but I believe that the benefits outweigh them in the long term (重新阐明观点-写作业对于 long term 是好的).

  (270 words, band 9)

  他在结尾用了long term 好处来替代Body 2 的主要观点, 因为 body 2 说了成年以后的好处。

  我们很多同学, 达不到这个功力,不到好想到这样概括

  所以,直接概括Body2的两个原因就可以

  e.g. 可以帮助学生独立思考以及未来处理问题

  以上为智课雅思内容:最新雅思高分范文及写作手法详解。希望今天的分析,对大家提升雅思写作水平有帮助。更多雅思写作方法和技巧,请大家多多关注智课网论坛!

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